UncategorizedFebruary 8, 2007 9:36 pm
I leave my finger there for a moment. Too stunned to move. I don’t cry out. I don’t say anything. I don’t even feel anything.
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Bad daddy
Sad daddy
Comment by ptcakes — February 9, 2007 @ 8:17 am
I remember reading this previously either in an essay or on this blog. Powerful stuff there. Nice to see you’ve come out of it as the opposite of him.
Comment by Steve — February 9, 2007 @ 9:46 am
Wow, scary story. I really like your ending…your last two sentences are a great ending. Great writing.
Comment by Emily — February 9, 2007 @ 5:30 pm
I love what you’re doing here in the present tense…keep going (I’m hearing the adult narrator step on the young Squirrel Girl, though…try letting the young you dominate this scene before the adult narrator comes in…what was Dad wearing? What does he smell like? What sort of day is it? What does your burning flesh smell like?). You’ve got the lines, now color in the moment.
KEEP GOING!!!
Comment by fatcharlatan — February 9, 2007 @ 8:52 pm